[RESULTS!!] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Battle

Hikatsu Nia · 07-15-2010, 01:45 PM

hehehe. yeah i guess so. i'm still lucky that i dont have to start all over again. regardless, i still have much more things to do. i didn't just add things, i did some rewrites aswell. so i just hope i can still finish in time.(I'll force myself if i have to! which would mean degrading its quality)

anyway thanks for the concern guys.

Kriegskanzler · 07-15-2010, 11:42 PM

^ Be quick with your post though. The competition ends tomorrow.

Hikatsu Nia · 07-16-2010, 02:32 AM

yes. i shall try my liege.

Hikatsu Nia · 07-16-2010, 04:50 PM

YEAH!!!! at last i made it!
it took me some effort but here it is.

this story dates back a few months after Purist joined the sentinels.
this pretty much covers how the skill "Divine shield" became "guardian angel".

Quote:

Sign-up number: 157281
Story Title: My Guardian Paladin
Max no. of words: 1,200
Story:

Quote:

Over the battle field stood two figures. In the background, many lie dead on the ground, others, mortally wounded. Luckily, I was among the latter.

The tension was rising each second as the two were looking at each other with contempt. One of the figures wielded a silver hammer with sapphire tinted armor.
While the other was a pale man that was mounted on a skeletal stead, and had an oddly shaped rune blade as his weapon.

The swordsman dismounts and takes a few steps towards the paladin.

"Your father ruled this land for seventy years, and you've ground it to dust in a matter of days. But undoing and destruction is easy, isn’t it?” the figure in blue states as he watches the man advance.

The pale knight clapped in a slow and insulting manner saying,
“Very dramatic, Uther. Give me the urn, and I’ll make sure you die quickly.”

Having heard this, the paladin replied with disgust saying, “The urn holds your father's ashes, Arthas! What, were you hoping to piss on them one last time before you left his kingdom to ROT?!”

“I didn't know what it held. Nor does it matter. I'll take what I came for one way or another.” The knight replies as he readies his charge.

Not wasting any time, the two champions engaging into a duel to the death.
Sweeps and slashes fly as the two collide. At first glance, the hammer was at a disadvantage. But in my point of view, it was the opposite. The hammer kept striking the blade as if to reshape it into something else. And with powerful swing, the hammer passed through all defenses, sending the rune blade flying from the death knight’s hands.

Getting ready to deal the killing blow, Uther lifted his glowing hammer. But with a stroke of wizardry, the rune blade that flew meters away, now lie in the grasp of Arthas once again, blocking the fatal blow.

The tides turned in favor of the knight. Strike after strike, Arthas returned every blow from Uther with interest. Each slash landed on the same spot, wounding him till the paladin was forced to his knees, bloodied and dying. Waiting for the final blow, Uther said, “I dearly hope that there’s a special place in hell waiting for you, Arthas.”

“We may never know, Uther,” Arthas said coldly, lifting Frostmourne for the final blow. “I intend to live forever.”

The sword dives down on Uther.
In an attempt to save the man that I called my teacher from his doom, I called to the light for its protection. I pour all my strength into it, yet still, Arthas was able to cut through it like nothing, killing Uther instantly

“UTHER!!!” I shout as loud as I can.

And then, total darkness and silence.

This is the dream that haunts me. Ever since the undead scourge, left Lordearon in ruins. Even after I’ve joined the sentinel, That memory still haunts me.

Even in the battle field, the images of the icy Frostmourne breaking through the light most divine shield renders me weak, leaving me as defenseless as a child.

Unable to take the pain and sorrow of my failure, I ask consult from the most wise of the all the elders of the sentinels. Furion.

“What troubles you, young paladin?” the druid asked as he gives me what seems to be tea.

Hesitantly, I answered. “Druid, I’m bothered by a failure of my doing that has long past. I lost the person I called teacher because of it.”

“Hmm, I see. Now, let me ask you...”

“How IS that YOUR failure?”

“I failed to protect him with the power of the light! THE MOST OMNIPOTENT POWER WAS IN MY HANDS! AND I FAILED TO SAVE THE LIFE OF THE PERSON WHO TAUGHT IT TO ME!”

“The light has forsaken me because of my weakness. It’s my fault! IT’S ALL MY FAULT!” And before I knew it, I was crying.

The elder elf puts a hand on my shoulder and says, “My child, don’t blame yourself. I may be a druid, but I can say that the light will not forsake anyone because of weakness. Also, your shan’do would appreciate it if you continued on without that memory.”

Then from out of nowhere, the bell that signaled the coming of the undead rang.

“I think we should continue this some other time. Go purist. Lead the front. I shall rally the others.” And as he finished, the druid vanished right in front of me.

At the war front, a large wave of undead comes towards us.

Out of the blue, Furion materializes besides me.

“The undead scourge. When will they understand the pain of the forest” Furion said with a chuckle.

Maybe never

“Young paladin, understand that your shan’do always watches over you. And the more you blame yourself, the more he is uneasy.”

The war continues.

Arrows and magic fly over us. Talons meet against claws.

Everyone was occupied, I was no exemption.

Suddenly the scourge began to fail.

Strike after strike, we push them back. Destroying one of there posts, we push further onwards. But danger was up ahead, and like that, we were ambushed, reducing our army to only me and Furion.

We were surrounded. Slowly, the enemies were closing-in on us. By impulse, I closed my eyes wishing that Uther was here. Suddenly, a blinding light engulfed my vision. In the distance, a figure began to appear.

As it drew closer it said. “What has become of you Purist? Why are you afraid to call for the Light? Has my death really become a breaking point for you?”

“Uther” I whispered.

“ANSWER ME BOY!!!”

“Y-Y-Yes!! Yes Uther!”

“Why then.”

“IT’S BECAUSE I FAILED YOU! I failed to save you.”

“Aye, you did. But understand that no one, not even the light could have saved me. Listen to me boy. You were born as the greatest defender of the light.”

“I don’t understand.”

“You’ll understand soon enough. Now, take Valius with you and go! Your friend needs your help.”
And like that, the light along with Uther, faded. My vision returned to the advancing undead. I felt as though nothing has changed, or has there.

Turning to my hammer, I notice it was no longer the steel hammer I once wielded. Instead, a silver hammer was in my hands.

Knowing what I must do, I raised the hammer and chanted these words.

“By the champions of the light,
Help me cleanse these undead.

By the hammer of the light bringer,
Help me defend my people.

BY THE POWER OF THE LIGHT!
COME TO ME! MY GUARDIAN ANGEL!”

At that very moment, an intense glow covered everyone. A warm yellow glow covered Furion and I, while the scourge burnt a bright red glow.

Seeking the opportunity, we drove the scourge back until they could no longer be seen on the horizon.

“Look Purist! We have won--”

Sadly, before those words could reach me, I have already collapsed from exhaustion.

“you have done well , so rest easy. Omni Knight.”

Before my consciousness completely faded, I uttered, “thank you… Uther.”

safetybreak · 07-16-2010, 05:39 PM

At the beginning I was little caught off-guard with Warcraft3 Campaign story, but it eventually all turned into well written story. Good luck in further competition!

The Berserker · 07-16-2010, 05:41 PM

That was some work, Hikatsu! Nice touch of the TFT Campaign. Got a little ticked off, tough.

Even though it's a pain in the ass to use my PC and write my notes at the same time, I'll rate your work. By the way, I have completed rating all of the submitted works. To those who haven't submitted yet theirs, I'm patiently waiting for it.

Hikatsu Nia · 07-16-2010, 06:21 PM

hehehe. thanks. i'm quite an addict when it come to warcraft lore.
also purist's backgrounds story said that uther trained him.
so i tried to use that as a basic connection.

EDIT: PS. Nia is my first name.(hikatsu is the surname) ^^

Fire525 · 07-16-2010, 10:53 PM

Nice story! No grammar or spelling mistakes, and was very interesting to read

The Berserker · 07-16-2010, 11:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Hikatsu Nia

hehehe. thanks. i'm quite an addict when it come to warcraft lore.
also purist's backgrounds story said that uther trained him.
so i tried to use that as a basic connection.

EDIT: PS. Nia is my first name.(hikatsu is the surname) ^^

Ah, I see.

Kriegskanzler · 07-17-2010, 02:35 AM

UPDATE:

Here are the changes as of 17th July 2010, Saturday, 10:27 AM GMT +8:

Added Hikatsu Nia's story link.

There's still a good seven hours or so until the deadline. Pass those stories!

P.S. Please do check your entry if its posted in the list. If it isn't, give me a PM so I could patch it up.

Fire525 · 07-17-2010, 10:05 AM

Sign-up number: 337015
Story Title: The Unquiet Dead
Number of Words: 1199

This my submission, hope you guys like it.

Quote:

A pale, handsome young man surveyed the barren plain before him. Seeing his target, he spurred his horse onwards, stopping a short distance away. A skeletal figure turned to face him, frost billowing around it. ‘You have come,’ the figure said, ‘Are you finally ready to die?’

Dismounting his horse, the man grinned, unsheathing his sword as he did so. ‘The only one to die today is you, lich.’

The lich chuckled, as the ice surrounding him began to thicken. Forming an orb of ice in his hand, he beckoned to the man. ‘Attack me then, if you really wish to die so much.’

Without warning, the man sprinted towards the lich, ducking the orb of ice thrown by the skeletal creature. Swinging his sword, he was surprised to find his weapon trapped in a wall of ice.

The lich chuckled again, before waving his hand. The wall disappeared, leaving the man free to attack. ‘Pathetic!’ the lich yelled. ‘Do you really think you can beat me with that sort of speed and strength?’

The man jumped back, before carving a sign in the ground with his sword. ‘That was just a warm-up!’ he replied, slamming his hand into the sign. Green flames flickered into existence around him, bathing him in light. He then gestured, and the flames began to pour into his mouth. Grinning, he threw his sword to the side, as his eyes began to glow.

The lich realised his danger an instant before the man struck, and quickly threw up a shield of ice. Moving faster than the lich could see, the man appeared behind him, throwing a punch at the shield. The ice shattered, unable to hold back the punch, and the lich was knocked to the ground by the force of the blow.

Getting to his feet, the lich grinned, as the frost around him began to fade. Concentrating his mana, a ball of ice began to slowly form in his hand. ‘You are fast, I’ll give you that,’ he said.

The man picked up his sword, as the flames around him began to burn more fiercely. ‘I told you I would kill you!’ he shouted, charging at the lich.

The lich shook his head, before throwing the orb of ice. ‘Only you will die today,’ he replied.

The man sneered, ducking the orb. ‘Did you really think that would hit me?’ he taunted. ‘I am too fast for you to even see!’

The lich made a small gesture with his hand, before replying, ‘You are much faster, but this attack will never miss.’ As he said this, the orb he had thrown finished its arc, and hit the man in the back. The resulting explosion was enormous, as the very air froze around the man.

Encased in a shell of ice, the man looked on as the lich gestured, and huge spikes began to form in the ice, driving into the man’s skin. As he screamed in pain, he felt the souls within him cry out, struggling to get free. He realised that he would not be able to contain them, that they would break free. He felt them rising up inside him, battling to take control. He fought them, and he lost.

And then, he remembered.

He remembered savage creatures attacking his village, killing his friends, family

He remembered his parents getting ripped apart in front of him, before being eaten by undead creatures.

He remembered the lich standing over him, reading his mana.

He remembered the lich nodding, and saying ‘He is the one we came for.’

He remembered realising that he was the reason that his parents had died.

He remembered being sent to an academy, where he was to learn necromancy.

He remembered being led to a chamber, filled with sorcerers.

He remembered them chanting, reaching into his mind with their spells.

He remembered them stripping him of his memories. But he was strong, and he would not let his village go unavenged.

He remembered hiding his memories, letting them believe that they had succeeded.

He remembered learning how to drain strength from souls.

He remembered swearing an oath to avenge his village.

He remembered summoning souls, binding their power.

He remembered his defences being overcome by a Nether being, attracted by his mana.

He remembered being overpowered, losing himself.

He remembered becoming Nevermore.

He remembered the souls overpowering Nevermore, allowing him to be himself once again.

He had lost himself, lost his path and his resolve. But he would fulfil his oath. He would not let it end like this, overpowered by the very being he had sworn to kill.

He screamed in rage, a cry echoed by the souls within him. And then he remembered who the souls were. His own villagers, his friends and his family. He had summoned them, intending to kill the lich with their power. But as Nevermore, he had treated them like slaves, abusing them until some of them faded, lost into the Nether.

He felt the ice from the lich’s prison dig deeper into him, drawing him ever closer to death. He knew that he would die soon, and would join his villagers in the Nether.

But not yet.

He had one task left to finish.

He felt the souls within him, eager to avenge themselves. He felt them lending him their power, their rage mingling with his, empowering him.

Raising his head, he spoke. ‘My village will be avenged.’

The lich gestured, causing the spikes to move further into the man. He was surprised that he had survived this long, but now he would be finished.

Suddenly, a cracking sound rent the air, as tentacles of darkness pushed the spikes out of the man’s body. The lich was stunned by shock, as the tentacles pushed at the prison, shattering it. Slowly, the man began to stride towards the lich, anger in his eyes.

Overcome by horror, the lich hurled countless orbs at the man, hoping to overcome him. The man merely smiled coldly, as the tentacles around him whipped the orbs into the ground, where they shattered.

Realising that nothing he did could stop the man, the lich cowered, begging for mercy. The man halted in front of the lich, his face filled with rage. ‘Mercy?’ he shouted, ‘Like you did?’ Suddenly the man’s expression changed, to one of pain. The tentacles withdrew into the man, revealing devastating wounds. The lich looked up, hopeful, as the man collapsed to his knees, blood flowing openly.

Anger filled the man. He did not have the strength to fulfil his oath.

He was too weak.

Deep within the man, the souls began to rise to the surface, empowered by his rage. The air around him began to glow, as the souls began to materialise into the physical world.

His village would be avenged!

Raising both arms, the man released the souls, directing them straight at the lich. With cries of rage, the souls poured outwards, obliterating all in their path. The lich was shredded, ripped apart by the souls of those he had killed.

The man smiled, as he felt the Nether overcome him.

He had fulfilled his oath.

Now, he could rest.

Kriegskanzler · 07-17-2010, 10:10 AM

^ Nice story. Liked the "He remembered..." lines, really epic.

Kriegskanzler · 07-17-2010, 10:12 AM

UPDATE:

Here are the changes as of 17th July 2010, Saturday, 06:08 PM GMT +8:

Added Fire525's story link.

There's still a good two hours before the deadline! Get those stories posted!!

Fire525 · 07-17-2010, 10:18 AM

^ Thanks, when planning the story, I thought it would be cool if when he has the flashbacks, it kept repeating that.

Hikatsu Nia · 07-17-2010, 10:27 AM

i told you you are awesome.

Fire525 · 07-17-2010, 10:36 AM

*Blushes*

Craxuan · 07-17-2010, 11:17 AM

Everything was good except for 'He too weak'. Haha.

Fire525 · 07-17-2010, 11:22 AM

^ Thanks

Hikatsu Nia · 07-17-2010, 11:37 AM

yey. we're done.

Hikatsu Nia · 07-17-2010, 11:39 AM

wait, there are still two people who have yet to give their entries.
ByronX and Dzink.

07-15-2010, 01:45 PM	#141
Hikatsu Nia Member Join Date: May 2010 Location: Land of the Vermillion sky. PH Posts: 1,623	[RESULTS!!] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Battle hehehe. yeah i guess so. i'm still lucky that i dont have to start all over again. regardless, i still have much more things to do. i didn't just add things, i did some rewrites aswell. so i just hope i can still finish in time.(I'll force myself if i have to! which would mean degrading its quality) anyway thanks for the concern guys. __________________ Signature 1 Signature 2 Banner Suggestion Word of Advice Behind the dark skies of night, the brilliant white moon shines please check out my PD contributions [Hero]Ethereal Swordsman, Midori/Ryoku Rename Shadow Demon thx^^ Visit me at http://tsukishiro009.deviantart.com

07-15-2010, 11:42 PM	#142
Kriegskanzler Member Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: The Philippines Posts: 4,481 Blog Entries: 6	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt ^ Be quick with your post though. The competition ends tomorrow. __________________ FF&L RPG: Alemannia \| The FF&L Newsletter \| Kanzler's FF&L Works \| Kanzler's Blog

07-16-2010, 02:32 AM	#143
Hikatsu Nia Member Join Date: May 2010 Location: Land of the Vermillion sky. PH Posts: 1,623	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt yes. i shall try my liege. __________________ Signature 1 Signature 2 Banner Suggestion Word of Advice Behind the dark skies of night, the brilliant white moon shines please check out my PD contributions [Hero]Ethereal Swordsman, Midori/Ryoku Rename Shadow Demon thx^^ Visit me at http://tsukishiro009.deviantart.com

07-16-2010, 05:39 PM	#145
safetybreak Member Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Croatia Posts: 724	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt At the beginning I was little caught off-guard with Warcraft3 Campaign story, but it eventually all turned into well written story. Good luck in further competition!

07-16-2010, 05:41 PM	#146
The Berserker Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philippines Posts: 6,743 Blog Entries: 14	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt That was some work, Hikatsu! Nice touch of the TFT Campaign. Got a little ticked off, tough. Even though it's a pain in the ass to use my PC and write my notes at the same time, I'll rate your work. By the way, I have completed rating all of the submitted works. To those who haven't submitted yet theirs, I'm patiently waiting for it. __________________

07-16-2010, 06:21 PM	#147
Hikatsu Nia Member Join Date: May 2010 Location: Land of the Vermillion sky. PH Posts: 1,623	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt hehehe. thanks. i'm quite an addict when it come to warcraft lore. also purist's backgrounds story said that uther trained him. so i tried to use that as a basic connection. EDIT: PS. Nia is my first name.(hikatsu is the surname) ^^ __________________ Signature 1 Signature 2 Banner Suggestion Word of Advice Behind the dark skies of night, the brilliant white moon shines please check out my PD contributions [Hero]Ethereal Swordsman, Midori/Ryoku Rename Shadow Demon thx^^ Visit me at http://tsukishiro009.deviantart.com

07-16-2010, 10:53 PM	#148
Fire525 Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Posts: 1,943	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt Nice story! No grammar or spelling mistakes, and was very interesting to read __________________ The Enigma Cool Suggestions My Fan-Fictions Epics & Legends Writing Battle 1: Birth Epics & Legends Writing Battle 2: The Unquiet Dead The Enigma The Mana The Horsemen

07-17-2010, 02:35 AM	#150
Kriegskanzler Member Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: The Philippines Posts: 4,481 Blog Entries: 6	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt UPDATE: Here are the changes as of 17th July 2010, Saturday, 10:27 AM GMT +8: Added Hikatsu Nia's story link. There's still a good seven hours or so until the deadline. Pass those stories! P.S. Please do check your entry if its posted in the list. If it isn't, give me a PM so I could patch it up. __________________ FF&L RPG: Alemannia \| The FF&L Newsletter \| Kanzler's FF&L Works \| Kanzler's Blog

07-17-2010, 10:10 AM	#152
Kriegskanzler Member Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: The Philippines Posts: 4,481 Blog Entries: 6	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt ^ Nice story. Liked the "He remembered..." lines, really epic. __________________ FF&L RPG: Alemannia \| The FF&L Newsletter \| Kanzler's FF&L Works \| Kanzler's Blog

07-17-2010, 10:12 AM	#153
Kriegskanzler Member Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: The Philippines Posts: 4,481 Blog Entries: 6	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt UPDATE: Here are the changes as of 17th July 2010, Saturday, 06:08 PM GMT +8: Added Fire525's story link. There's still a good two hours before the deadline! Get those stories posted!! __________________ FF&L RPG: Alemannia \| The FF&L Newsletter \| Kanzler's FF&L Works \| Kanzler's Blog

07-17-2010, 10:18 AM	#154
Fire525 Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Posts: 1,943	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt ^ Thanks, when planning the story, I thought it would be cool if when he has the flashbacks, it kept repeating that. __________________ The Enigma Cool Suggestions My Fan-Fictions Epics & Legends Writing Battle 1: Birth Epics & Legends Writing Battle 2: The Unquiet Dead The Enigma The Mana The Horsemen

07-17-2010, 10:27 AM	#155
Hikatsu Nia Member Join Date: May 2010 Location: Land of the Vermillion sky. PH Posts: 1,623	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt i told you you are awesome. __________________ Signature 1 Signature 2 Banner Suggestion Word of Advice Behind the dark skies of night, the brilliant white moon shines please check out my PD contributions [Hero]Ethereal Swordsman, Midori/Ryoku Rename Shadow Demon thx^^ Visit me at http://tsukishiro009.deviantart.com

07-17-2010, 10:36 AM	#156
Fire525 Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Posts: 1,943	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt Blushes __________________ The Enigma Cool Suggestions My Fan-Fictions Epics & Legends Writing Battle 1: Birth Epics & Legends Writing Battle 2: The Unquiet Dead The Enigma The Mana The Horsemen

07-17-2010, 11:17 AM	#157
Craxuan Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 1,394	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt Everything was good except for 'He too weak'. Haha. __________________ Hex- MADE ELWB 2 ELWB 3 KS

07-17-2010, 11:22 AM	#158
Fire525 Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Posts: 1,943	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt ^ Thanks __________________ The Enigma Cool Suggestions My Fan-Fictions Epics & Legends Writing Battle 1: Birth Epics & Legends Writing Battle 2: The Unquiet Dead The Enigma The Mana The Horsemen

07-17-2010, 11:37 AM	#159
Hikatsu Nia Member Join Date: May 2010 Location: Land of the Vermillion sky. PH Posts: 1,623	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt yey. we're done. __________________ Signature 1 Signature 2 Banner Suggestion Word of Advice Behind the dark skies of night, the brilliant white moon shines please check out my PD contributions [Hero]Ethereal Swordsman, Midori/Ryoku Rename Shadow Demon thx^^ Visit me at http://tsukishiro009.deviantart.com

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07-17-2010, 11:39 AM	#160
Hikatsu Nia Member Join Date: May 2010 Location: Land of the Vermillion sky. PH Posts: 1,623	Re: [Competition] 2nd Epics & Legends Writing Batt wait, there are still two people who have yet to give their entries. ByronX and Dzink. __________________ Signature 1 Signature 2 Banner Suggestion Word of Advice Behind the dark skies of night, the brilliant white moon shines please check out my PD contributions [Hero]Ethereal Swordsman, Midori/Ryoku Rename Shadow Demon thx^^ Visit me at http://tsukishiro009.deviantart.com