[NEUT-AGI] Neevil - The Optomaniac

[Lotus V Eater]

• INTRO
• SKILLS
• SYNERGY
• CHANGELOG
• CREDITS
• OTHERS

• Introduction
• Advance Statistics
• Hero's Icon/Model
• Hero's Iconset
  

NEEVIL - THE OPTOMANIAC

Hero Introduction:
Neevil is a one of the hero that apply technology as a part of his skills. Main theme for his skills is laser and magnetic pulse. Neevil can equipped his weapon with laser, burning his enemies armor and rendering them to be more vulnerable to incoming damage. He also can let loose a magnetic pulse from his weapon also. The pulse will damage and tumbling the enemies inwards. Besides, he can amplifies the damage taken by his enemies and ultimately transmit laser beam from the Goblin's Satellite, and damage any units it hits. The laser is controllable and this sure wanna make you to run away.

Background Story:
Neevil parted ways with his former partner Boush, the Tinker when they both ventured into different studies of more in-depth goblin engineering. Neevil focused on magnetism and the power of light amplification by stimulated energy radiation, which in the real world is also known as laser. Sail somehow lets loose electrifying laser beams to unsuspecting foes, shedding their exterior and incapacitating them and make sure they stay that way. Sparkling particles of light and ion fill up the void of the surroundings as Neevil haphazardly brings his marvelous goblin feat to the Sentinel, hoping to finally meet again with his goblin friend.

Strength - 15 + 1.5
Agility - 25 + 2.5
Intelligence - 20 + 2.0

Affiliation:	Sentinel
Damage:	41 - 51
Armor:	2
Movespeed:	310
Starting HP/MP:	435 / 260
Attack Range:	450 (Range)
BAT:	1.7
Sight Range:	1800 / 800

Theme: Goblin/ Laser/ Magnetic
Role: Initiator/ Ganker/ Carry

Learns: Extreme Assault, Goblin's Magnetism, Sparkling Light and Ion Laser

• Extreme Assault
• Goblin's Magnetism
• Sparkling Light
• Ion Laser
  

EXTREME ASSAULT [T]

Neevil equips his weapon with a special laser that, at every attack burns of enemies' armor and deal extra damage. The laser attacks everytime Neevil attacks. While activated, this skill will drain mana per attack.

Level 1: Laser depletes 1.00 armor per 4 attacks. Deal extra damage for 10 + (2 x Amount of Armor missing for the past 5 sec).
Level 2: Laser depletes 1.00 armor per 3 attacks. Deal extra damage for 20 + (2 x Amount of Armor missing for the past 5 sec).
Level 3: Laser depletes 1.00 armor per 2 attacks. Deal extra damage for 30 + (2 x Amount of Armor missing for the past 5 sec).
Level 4: Laser depletes 1.00 armor per attack. Deal extra damage for 40 + (2 x Amount of Armor missing for the past 5 sec).
Orb effects do not stack
Buff placers do not stack

Cooldown: 6/4/2/0 seconds
Mana Cost: 30/35/40/45 per attack when activated
Type: Toggle
Target: Single Enemy Unit
Framework: A continuous blue laser beam will came out from Neevil's weapon.
Notes:
- Damage type is physical.
- When this skill is activated, the laser will automatically burns the unit's armor that he attacks.
- The amount of Armor depletes have a cap of 5/10/15/25.
- The depletes armor of the affected unit will be restored back after 2 sec when Neevil change his attack's target.

GOBLIN'S MAGNETISM [G]

Neevil let loose a wave of magnetic pulse at the target area. As the wave goes forward, any units affect by the pulse will be tumbling inwards to the center of the wave, receive slight damage and slow their MS for short duration. Slow last for 3 sec at all level.

Level 1: The wave will travel to maximum distance of 1800 and instantly pulled the enemy units inwards. The wave have a width of 200. The unit will receive 125 damage, purged and decrease MS by a factor of 2.
Level 2: The wave will travel to maximum distance of 1800 and instantly pulled the enemy units inwards. The wave have a width of 240. The unit will receive 150 damage, purged and decrease MS by a factor of 2.
Level 3: The wave will travel to maximum distance of 1800 and instantly pulled the enemy units inwards. The wave have a width of 280. The unit will receive 175 damage, purged and decrease MS by a factor of 3.
Level 4: The wave will travel to maximum distance of 1800 and instantly pulled the enemy units inwards. The wave have a width of 320. The unit will receive 200 damage, purged and decrease MS by a factor of 3.

Cooldown: 15 seconds
Mana Cost: 100/120/130/140
Type: Active
Target: Ground
Framework: A blue magnetic wave will travel forward. As the unit being pulled in, they will have an animation of being purged.
Notes:
- Damage type is physical.
- This does not affect immune unit.
- The wave gives vision as it goes forward.
- The wave will pull 200 units distance per sec.
- The purge will damage summoned unit for 400/400/500/500.

SPARKLING LIGHT [H]

Every time Neevil attacks his enemy, he has a % chance to accidentally cause his laser to shine outrageously which amplifies the damage taken from Neevil's normal attack and spell. The amplify damage buff lasts for 3 seconds at all level.

Level 1: 20% to cause his laser to shine outrageously that will cause the unit to receive 25% amplified damage from Neevil's normal attack and spell.
Level 2: 22% to cause his laser to shine outrageously that will cause the unit to receive 35% amplified damage from Neevil's normal attack and spell.
Level 3: 24% to cause his laser to shine outrageously that will cause the unit to receive 45% amplified damage from Neevil's normal attack and spell.
Level 4: 26% to cause his laser to shine outrageously that will cause the unit to receive 55% amplified damage from Neevil's normal attack and spell.

Cooldown: N/A
Mana Cost: N/A
Type: Passive
Target: Enemy units (Hero, Creeps and NC)
Framework: The unit will have the same miss effect on Tinker's Laser Beam.
Notes:
- Spell amplification will affect all sort of damage type either it is magical, physical or even pure.
- Work on Neevil's attack and spell only.
- The amplified damage is count from the normal attack damage and spell damage itself.
- This effect will trigger on the initial cast of a spell or attack.
- The animation will last for 3 sec, same with the debuff duration.

ION LASER [R]

Transmits controllable Ion-based laser beams from Neevil's satellite. The beam will start to be transmitted at 600 range in front of Weevil and damages enemy units that got hit for a brief period of time. Duration of laser beam increases per level.

Level 1: 0.75 sec casting time. The ion laser will damage any unit it upon hits for 40 damage. Transmits 1 laser beam which move at a speed of 300. Last for 4 sec.
Level 2: 0.75 sec casting time. The ion laser will damage any unit it upon hits for 50 damage, each. Transmits 2 laser beam which move at a speed of 350. Last for 5 sec.
Level 3: 0.75 sec casting time. The ion laser will damage any unit it upon hits for 60 damage, each. Transmits 3 laser beam which move at a speed of 400. Last for 6 sec.

Cooldown: 100
Mana Cost: 150/200/250
Type: Active
Target: Ground, Enemy units
Framework: A medium-sized laser beam will be fired from above. The laser will cause the surrounding area (probably 300 - 450 AOE) to be lightened in blue aura. The ground that has been traveled by the laser will be tinted black, and a steam will come out from it (due to the fact that the laser is very hot).
Notes:
- The laser will damage units within the width of 150.
- The laser will have 100 distance with each other.
- Damage type is physical.
- The laser that is not been control will damage units in a straight line, starting from the points it has been transmitted.
- The beam destroyed trees.
- Affect mechanical and organic units.
- The laser will gives vision as it goes forward.

• Skill Synergy
• Item Synergy
• Hero Synergy

August 08, 2010
- Tweak his 2nd skill, and change its name from Goblin Charm to Goblin's Magnetism.
- Added the Background Story.
- Change his name.
- Remake his 3rd skill.
August 09, 2010
- Add a proper model for Sail.
- Change his name again...and again...
August 10, 2010
- Add Hero Introduction and lower his base damage.
- Edit some of the typos and add new rephrased ultimate.
- Change his title from Techno Mage to Spectrum Analyzer.
- Tweaks his 1st skill.
- Added sound text for Neevil.
August 11, 2010
- Add some important notes on his skills.
August 12, 2010
- Change his title from Spectrum Analyzer to The Optomaniac (thanks to FallinDevast)
August 16, 2010
- Fixing some typos, and tweak his 1st and 2nd spell.
- Added testmap!

king_james, Cainer,.kA25, TLG, FallinDevast and everyone for everything!

• Sound
• Testmap
• ScreenShot
  

1 - Here we go again.
2 - Uuuu...you again?
3 - I got my Laser Gun here.
4 - I'm all geared up.
5 - Hot scorching laser beam...
6 - Ya'll ready?
7 - Let's roll out.
8 - Lets finish him first.
9 - You go handle that.
10 - What a shame...
11 - Taste my laser gun!
12 - Ya shall no survive...
13 - Anywhere to go, buddy *evil laugh*
14 - My laser will burn you till death!
15 - I'm a Goblin Doc, don't ya afraid of me?
16 - *ssssss* Opppss i burned maself...
17 - Sneaky snakey!
18 - Why don't you play death in front of me?
19 - *zzzzzz* I think my laser is ready!
20 - Wait, wait i call for help from Starwars Troopers
21 - I've got my beam ready now. Wanna test it?
22 - Yay, what?

TESTMAP ADDED, and thanks a lot to Cainer!

[king_james]

HRT, story later.

Stats - Don't forget to add them later. Doi!

Model - Can you give me a hint?

1 - Basically, the skill doesn't say what it needs to say, it kind of lacks explanation. A Great skill actually, its somewhat a great alternative rather than you yourself causing the -armor. I think this is what you mean to say:

I've placed it in a better version of the tool-tip.

Sail equips his weapon with a special laser that, at every attack burns of enemies' armor. The laser attacks everytime Sail attacks. While activated, this skill will drain mana per second.

Level 1: Laser depletes 0.25 armor per attack.
Level 2: Laser depletes 0.55 armor per attack.
Level 3: Laser depletes 0.75 armor per attack.
Level 4: Laser depletes 1 armor per attack.

Cooldown: N/A
Mana Cost: 80/70/60/50 per sec when activated
Type: Toggle
Target: Single Enemy Unit
Framework: A continuous blue laser beam will blast out to anyone Sail attacks
Notes:
- When this skill is activated, the laser will automatically burn the targetted unit's armor that Sail attacks.
- The amount of Armor deplete have no cap.
- This skill will automatically change target when Sail change his attack's target.

This way, its more balanced, as you wait for Sail's attack cooldown for the skill to work. Awhile ago, the skill was underbalanced. And the /sec didn't make much sense. Here's an idea. Why don't you make the cooldown very very low. Say 3/2/1/0 seconds, like an autocast ability. This makes it more versatile and reliable. Another thing, the mana lost from the ability is way too high. I don't think a player would even want the ability going of per second, as it matches Leshrac's ulti mana per sec.

2 - There is no point in this skill. I'm sorry. There's a lack of synergy, creativity and very bad, IMO. Lore-wise, I don't think there are Elder Goblin spirits, they don't seem to believe in that. Another thing, there isn't a direct transparency of synergy working or thematic appeal. Scrap this please.

3 - Good in concept, lacking more of explanation. What is the AoE of the outburst of the ability? And doesn't the sparking light (of 10 seconds) have a duration that is quite long? I suggest a shorter and more explanatory tool-tip

Every time Sail attacks his enemy, he has a % chance to accidentally cause his laser to shine outrageously. The sparkling lights will restrict the movements of the units that he attacks and can possibly cause other units nearby to be affected as well. The sparkling light lasts for 10(I suggest lowering this) seconds.

4 - Further explanation please. It doesn't make much sense.

Overall - This hero is still incomplete and needs a LOT of work, but all I can say is that your working on a good hero here. I'll be back to check.

[Lotus V Eater]

Originally Posted by king_james

HRT, story later.

Stats - Don't forget to add them later. Doi! okay!

Model - Can you give me a hint? a goblin...hahaha

1 - Basically, the skill doesn't say what it needs to say, it kind of lacks explanation. A Great skill actually, its somewhat a great alternative rather than you yourself causing the -armor. I think this is what you mean to say:

I've placed it in a better version of the tool-tip.
This way, its more balanced, as you wait for Sail's attack cooldown for the skill to work. Awhile ago, the skill was underbalanced. And the /sec didn't make much sense. Here's an idea. Why don't you make the cooldown very very low. Say 3/2/1/0 seconds, like an autocast ability. This makes it more versatile and reliable. Another thing, the mana lost from the ability is way too high. I don't think a player would even want the ability going of per second, as it matches Leshrac's ulti mana per sec.
maybe i will make it as orb effect/buff placer autocast spell. thanks for the tooltip!

2 - There is no point in this skill. I'm sorry. There's a lack of synergy, creativity and very bad, IMO. Lore-wise, I don't think there are Elder Goblin spirits, they don't seem to believe in that. Another thing, there isn't a direct transparency of synergy working or thematic appeal. Scrap this please.
i thought this skill will be great. Okay, let say i attack you, and cast this on you while you facing me. since you just walk straight to me, i can definitely deal max damage, without worrying that you gonna go away. maybe i add silence, to avoid the possibility of the hero from blinking away or disable you!

besides the straight walking gonna synergize well with his ultimate. just let the hero walk straight and cast ulti. but need perfect timing...

3 - Good in concept, lacking more of explanation. What is the AoE of the outburst of the ability? And doesn't the sparking light (of 10 seconds) have a duration that is quite long? I suggest a shorter and more explanatory tool-tip
i will reduce the duration of the effects, and reduce the text for tooltip too.

4 - Further explanation please. It doesn't make much sense.
do you play GENERAL? its like the ultimate weapon of the America.........where the China team got his nuclear as their ultimate weapon (you can find Black Lotus in this team too)...well i hope you play it...since i can't explain it very well...

Overall - This hero is still incomplete and needs a LOT of work, but all I can say is that your working on a good hero here. I'll be back to check.
thanks...

qq

[king_james]

maybe i will make it as orb effect/buff placer autocast spell. thanks for the tooltip! Yes, exactly. I suggest a buff placer instead. I mean its not Sail, per se who is inflicting the armor leakage, its his skill. Make it a buff placer.

i thought this skill will be great. Okay, let say i attack you, and cast this on you while you facing me. since you just walk straight to me, i can definitely deal max damage, without worrying that you gonna go away. maybe i add silence, to avoid the possibility of the hero from blinking away or disable you! well this is just my opinion. My matter of opinion was synergy and theme-based wise. its up to you whether or not you choose to keep this skill. It is your hero anyway.

besides the straight walking gonna synergize well with his ultimate. just let the hero walk straight and cast ulti. but need perfect timing... i think that's another reason why i didn't like it, i didn't understand the ulti. I'll take a look.

do you play GENERAL? its like the ultimate weapon of the America.........where the China team got his nuclear as their ultimate weapon (you can find Black Lotus in this team too)...well i hope you play it...since i can't explain it very well... actually, no, I still don't comprehen it completely. I'll try my best to understand it once you've tweaked it a bit.

thanks... np, pillow

answers in red.

[Lotus V Eater]

Yes, exactly. I suggest a buff placer instead. I mean its not Sail, per sec who is inflicting the armor leakage, its his skill. Make it a buff placer. yes, i will tweak it to be like that!

well this is just my opinion. My matter of opinion was synergy and theme-based wise. its up to you whether or not you choose to keep this skill. It is your hero anyway.
okay, i will try to find a better concept. thanks for your advise...

i think that's another reason why i didn't like it, i didn't understand the ulti. I'll take a look.

actually, no, I still don't comprehen it completely. I'll try my best to understand it once you've tweaked it a bit.

np, pillow
i'm starting to loikes the nickname...hurrmmm i will ask ma buddy for a testmap to enhance your (and others) understanding about his skills.

qq

[king_james]

Oh, so a controllable uprising laser? Hmm... interesting.

So, wouldn't that be a big hassle to control it? I mean you have Sail to worry about, you would be forced out of microing [aka controlling] him. Also, a speed of 150, is very very very slow.

[Lotus V Eater]

Originally Posted by king_james

Oh, so a controllable uprising laser? Hmm... interesting.

So, wouldn't that be a big hassle to control it? I mean you have Sail to worry about, you would be forced out of microing [aka controlling] him. Also, a speed of 150, is very very very slow.

owh, the slow MS is to balance it. i make it based on Wildkin's tornado...so any idea on appropriate MS for the laser? i think Sail will have no problem to be control, as he got a passive that can slow the units...as the new 2nd skill to relocate all the enemy units in a line so that they can be hit perfectly by his ulti...have you check it out?

and i hope you can help me to rephrase the tooltip, to be a lil bit understandable...

[king_james]

Second skill, what do you mean the enemy moves toward? Toward the AoE or Sail? Ok, I'm seeing some life of synergy here, but its really really small. The ultimate acts slow to balance, I see, but being so slow, how can you possibly make some hits? And the passive will never ALWAYS make the other units walk slower. You need a more reliable asset. I'll discuss this later on.

[Lotus V Eater]

Originally Posted by king_james

Second skill, what do you mean the enemy moves toward? Toward the AoE or Sail? Ok, I'm seeing some life of synergy here, but its really really small. The ultimate acts slow to balance, I see, but being so slow, how can you possibly make some hits? And the passive will never ALWAYS make the other units walk slower. You need a more reliable asset. I'll discuss this later on.

its like when the unit were pulled by Tauren Chieftain's ultimate. sorry, my English sucks...

maybe i will increase the laser's MS. How about 300/350/400. Maybe i will think of something for his Aghanim's upgrade then...

thanks...

[king_james]

A 300-400 variable would be nice. So then, you are saying its towards the target point, eh? haha. I'm opening up more discussion points so you can see what the potential flaws are with this hero, so far, there are quite a few. Synergy is one, but were still working on that.

For Aghanim upgrade, its not that necessary to add it in, there's just no point to it, , well unless IceFrog really finds your hero zomgwtfimbaqq AMAZING!!!!!

[Lotus V Eater]

okay:

-no Aghanim for him.
-increase the laser MS.
-i still thinking on remaking his 3rd skill in order to make it more versatile n at the same time synergize well with his other skills.

[king_james]

I'm actually quite fond of your 3rd ability. The only problem is how we fit it to the picture with the other skills, except 1 which it already clicks. Skills 2 and 4 have a slight connection. But how about intertwining both combos to make it one deadly one? I mean that is what we are all looking for in synergy.

Thinking about it, pulling in units from skill 2 allows some units to enter the required AoE for Sparking Light to hit them, maybe an indirect synergy?

[Lotus V Eater]

you want the 3rd skill to deal damage also? or maybe instead of lowering the MS, maybe encase them with a shield that can amplifies any physical damage? or maybe tweak the 1st spell to affect multiple units? or maybe amplifies the damage taken by affected unit based on the number of units that already affected by his skill? or a passive upgrade skill that can cause his spell can damages siege unit n tower as well (which can help to maximize the types of unit can be affected by his spell)?

[king_james]

Originally Posted by Pink_Lotus

you want the 3rd skill to deal damage also? No no, I was just saying it already had an indirect line of synergy or maybe instead of lowering the MS, maybe encase them with a shield that can amplifies any physical damage possibly, but you've already incapacitated them (made them unable to move), but maybe, just maybe it could work amplification should work. I mean it is in the story, hehe? or maybe tweak the 1st spell to affect multiple units? no, that would be completely complicated and complex to do. the 1st skill is fine as it is. or maybe amplifies the damage taken by affected unit based on the number of units that already affected by his skill say what??!?!?! I didn't understand this bit? or a passive upgrade skill that can cause his spell can damages siege unit n tower as well (which can help to maximize the types of unit can be affected by his spell) also did not understand this bit. haha sorry.?

Also, I'd like to add that the name Laser Master, automatically draws off users from looking at your hero idea. It comes of as a mediocre name and kind of sounds like a fun name. I'd suggest something more "sophisticated". Goblin Mechanic? Laser Mechanic? Goblin Laser Machine? Goblin Beam? Beam Goblin? Laser Goblin? Mechanic Laser? That sounds quite good. Sail, the Mechanic Laser, well for me. haha

[Lotus V Eater]

nah....nvm if you didn't understand it. maybe damage amplification should work perfectly on his 3rd skill.

i will change his name to Sail - The Mechanic Laser. thanks a lot! you totally good at everything. well i think i'm gonna make this hero as a collaboration between you and me...can i? in order to attract more people to review it! hehehe

[Nizaris]

Skill 1 : is it effective against armor from aura and magic too? Or just armor that enemy wear?

Skill 2 : so much like Enigma

The other 2 skills are fine for me. I like the intro, so sentimental

[Lotus V Eater]

Originally Posted by Nizaris

Skill 1 : is it effective against armor from aura and magic too? Or just armor that enemy wear?
it will reduce armor, regardless it is armor that the hero gain from item or base armor...

Skill 2 : so much like Enigma
nah, it is not! much more like Tauren's ulti! XD

The other 2 skills are fine for me. I like the intro, so sentimental
Thanks....credits goes to king_james for helping me with the story! him!

qq, thanks for the review though...

[1337_n00b]

Hold up a place for me. I will do a review, i swear. Not today, though.

Because, for once, i am not lying that i like your hero.

[Lotus V Eater]

thanks...i'm waiting for da review...

[Nizaris]

Isn't it will become OP if auto cast? imagine if shoot many times

AGI +AS right like Drow, so if he shoot 10 times?