[AGI,SENT]Sky Captain , Rain Skyfeather

khalid102 · 06-06-2011, 11:47 AM

Sky Captain
Rain Skyfeather

__Strength__

_Agility_

_Intelligence_

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_18 + 2.8_

_25 + 3.1_

_19 + 2.7_

Attack

Storm Infusion

Since the dragonawk and a few other flying models have never been used i had an idea that they were all fighting in a different far off war, but have now returned under the guidance of their captain to fight as mercs.

After many years fighting for hire, the sky squad had finally retired , but during there twilight years a new war broke out and they thought that battle had once again knocked on their doors.Elder Rain was donning his war armour , but was stopped by his son, "It is my time father", was al he said as he took the family mantle of Captain, aided by the people of the sky young Rain will turn back the tide of war, by slipping through the clouds, or leading the cavalry, he is a force to be feared.

Sky CallAbility Type: Active
Targeting Type: AOE
Ability Hotkey : C

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Sends Forth Cloud Warriors to lay havoc to enemies, sends cloud warriors in a straight path chilling enemies ,where upon arrival they disperse for a AOE purge and damage.If cast from within the clouds , will auto cast a second time after 1 sec delay.

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	Mana	Cooldown	C. Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	MC:90	CD:15	1000		until selected area	Sends Cloud Warriors in a straight path, 4% slow, 2 secs AOE purge.100 damage
2	MC:100	CD:14	1000		until selected area	Sends Cloud Warriors in a straight path, 8% slow, 2 secs AOE purge.150 damage
3	MC:110	CD:13	1000		until selected area	Sends Cloud Warriors in a straight path, 16% slow, 2 secs AOE purge.200 damage
4	MC:120	CD:12	1000		until selected area	Sends Cloud Warriors in a straight path, 20% slow, 2 secs AOE purge. 250 damage

Notes:

The cloud warriors are actually water elemetals , but white in colour, they move like how tides gush moves, but slightly slower and white.
they chill all enemies on their path,
they explode at end of path for a 250 AOE purge and damage.
Slow does no Stack.

Cloud CoverAbility Type: Active
Targeting Type: No target
Ability Hotkey : D

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Covers an area in cloud where the captain and any of his units are invisible and they get a movement speed increase.they return to visible if they leave the cloud area.

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	Mana	Cooldown	C. Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	60	15	600	250aoeX3 in a row	6secs	Level 1 - 10% ms increase lasts 6 secs
2	70	15	600	250aoeX3 in a row	8secs	Level 2 - 15% ms increase lasts 8 secs
3	80	13	600	250aoeX3 in a row	10secs	Level 3 - 20% ms increase lasts 10 secs
4	90	12	600	250aoeX3 in a row	12secs	Level 4 - 24% ms increase lasts 12 secs

Notes:

Like rikis cloud, but these are 3 in a row ,that have the AOE of rikis 2nd cloud each, this is great for chasing , escaping.the
clouds are visible to all enemies and allies alike.
the clouds are in a fissure like formation , 3 in a row.
O O O<-

Gryphon VanguardAbility Type: Passive
Targeting Type: No target
Ability Hotkey : R

____________________	Summons the captains gryphon vaguard, they are passive, but can be killed after a specefic amount of hits.They have MS=captains.
AS=1/3 his attack speed.
Damage=1/3 his agility.

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	Mana	Cooldown	C. Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	-	-				Die after 3 hits, 25 sec auto respawn if killed.
2	-	-				Die after 4 hits, 20 sec auto respawn if killed.
3	-	-				Die after 5 hits, 15 sec auto respawn if killed.
4	-	-				Die after 6 hits, 10 sec auto respawn if killed.

Notes:

They follow him arround 1 on each side slightly to the back, they give 50 gold each if killed.
Will respawn if killed after a specific amount of time automatically
Die instantly for no bounty if captain is killed.
Benefit from cloud cover.
This is a passive summon like gyros bombs.
They turn invis in the clouds also and only attack what you attack wen you attack, no ramboing
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Storm InfusionAbility Type: Active
Targeting Type: No target
Ability Hotkey : F

____________________	Infuses the captain with the power of the sky giving him Attack Speed,a chance purge orb effect and 1 attack Crit.Does a 0.8 sec ministun in a 250 AOE on activation.
If cast within clouds , grants bonuses to allied gryphons.

__	____.	________.	_______.	___.	_______.	__________________________.
	Mana	Cooldown	C. Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	100	60	-	500	10	10% AS increase and chance for purge on attack ,10 temp agility for duration,and a 2.5 crit on next attack(once off).10 secs
2	120	50	-	500	12	20% AS increase and chance for purge on attack ,20 temp agility for duration,and a 2.5 crit on next attack(once off).12 secs
3	150	40	-	500	14	30% AS increase and chance for purge on attack ,30 temp agility for duration,and a 2.5 crit on next attack(once off).14 secs

Notes:

Purge is 1 sec slow, and buff removal.
Great for chasing and finishing.
Gryphons get the AS and damage from the extra agility ,and purge orb effect, so for instance lvl 3 ulti his attackX2.5 plus the gryphons who get crit and benefit for 1 attack from the agility increase, (damage calculated after applying added agility)for duration of the spell

TheBig(D) · 06-06-2011, 12:22 PM

Ok.Here's how I do it.When you're done making your hero,use the "Export" button to export your hero to anywhere you like.Then,go to that file,open it using Notepad,copy and paste the entire text.Voila!

khalid102 · 06-06-2011, 01:23 PM

updated 1st post , thnx maximillian

TheBig(D) · 06-06-2011, 01:49 PM

You're welcome

Welcome to PD btw.I hope you enjoy your time here
Your hero seems to be good at first looks but too bad I don't have time to read and review it now.

khalid102 · 06-07-2011, 02:41 PM

will any1 rate my hero? review? anything?

Facebook · 06-07-2011, 03:05 PM

I will ONLY review your hero, IF, i already reviewed it.

PARADOX ALERT!!!!!!!!!!!!!

khalid102 · 06-08-2011, 06:09 AM

what? any1 at all?

Facebook · 06-08-2011, 07:42 AM

Review:
1st skill: The concept is good, but the problem is, is the summon unit, summoning unit is enough for DotA, try changing this skill to a better one, but dont lose the concept of that skill.
2nd skill: Synergies well with skills, like your concept in synergizing, so no problems.
3rd skill: Kinda bad and imba, just rescale the damage to 25/50/75/100 damage while the captain takes 12.5/25/37.5/50 damage
Ulti: Same as first skill, just renew this skill but dont change it's concept, cause the synergy is good.

Here are your goals from now:
- Renew the 1st and ultimate skill, but dont change the concept
- Rescale the damage of 3rd skill
- Ask someone to review this hero.
- Ask someone (or go to fan fiction section) to make a background story for you.
- Introduce yourself in Introduce page.

khalid102 · 06-08-2011, 11:02 AM

thnx for the review fade2black i updated it , what do you think now?
il review any1s if they take the time toreview mines.

tusuksate · 06-08-2011, 11:26 AM

1st skill, overall it's nice skill but poison owl is funny, change it...

2nd skill, simple but acceptable skill..

3th skill, why this skill has very short cooldown and the other hand his ulti has very long cooldown...

ulti, exorcism but still have difference....

T-D for now

Vot1_Bear · 06-08-2011, 11:17 PM

I'll do only a simple review if you don't mind

1st skill- Thematically unfitting imo. Owls are kinda elf-ish while the model is human. And poison just doesn't fits him. Anyway, it's kinda like veno's Venomous gale, Only that it can explode via 3rd skill. Does slow/dps stack with each other? Dps stack is fine but slow stack is imba

Not only that, affecting units between 75 AoE is VERY HARD to do. Make it 200-300 AoE instead. 75 AoE is awfully small and almost incapable of hitting enemies imo.

2nd skill-
O...kay. I'm not really sure about this. What shape will the clouds look like? Straight shape like fissure or AoE like riki?

3rd skill-
I think you meant Harakiri instead of hirakiri. OT, it's kinda evil to detonate your own allies isn't it? Not only that, is it worth it? Is 100 damage worth killing your squad which pretty much deals double-triple that damage over one second (Assuming you have 70 Agi and lvl 3 ulti). Not only that, it damages self aswell.

Ulti-
Is it good enough to be an ulti? I honestly think it lasts too shortly. 12s is too short for a summon skill, and krob's ghosts pretty much deals more damage than this. Maybe buff damage and duration

Synergy-
The synergy you're aiming here might be cloud-summon-owl-boom. But there's some problem...
-Your ulti summons are your main damage source, 4xAgi dmg per sec at level 3
-You need 1st skill for your ulti to land some hits at target
-3rd skill detonates ALL your units.
-So basically you can't detonate your owl or else your summons will self-bomb too.
-your detonate damage output is very low. Detonating all your units can only give about 600 damage and 300 damage to self. WTF?

Sugg:
-Owl: increase AoE
-Cloud: Just clarify what you mean
-Harakiri: Buff damage, seriously. Something that requires that much sacrifice must deal shitloads of damage
-Ulti: maybe buff it a little

GL in further developments, this hero needs a lot of work

khalid102 · 06-09-2011, 05:59 AM

thanx for the reviews guys , i took what you guys said into consideration and made him better i hope, pls take a 2nd look? hes more like a captain of the skys now

Facebook · 06-09-2011, 06:16 AM

1st skill, Good and best. No problems
2nd skill, fix the MS duration to 6/8/10/12 seconds
3rd skill, What's the synergy to other skills anyway?
Ultimate skill, change it's theme to more sky themed (or at least wind themed)

btw, please tell us the synergy so we could understand.

Facebook · 06-09-2011, 06:27 AM

Change also your Title to "[Agi-Sent]Rain Skyfeather, Sky captain"

Facebook · 06-09-2011, 01:14 PM

Change the title by pressing edit button, if you still can't modify it, go to "Go advanced".

khalid102 · 06-09-2011, 02:28 PM

thanks for all the suggestions fade, i redid the skills like you suggested , pls comment if it is too your liking, also added back-story, wrote it myself so its kinda lame.

Facebook · 06-09-2011, 03:00 PM

I will make a cooler background story for ya if i have some time, maybe tomorrow.

ReaC · 06-09-2011, 03:04 PM

REVIEW!!!

another hero with low stat gain, im just wondering why. can you justify it?

1st skill - hmm.. good skill. but im not suitable with the cast range. how aout like this... it's point-target but the projectile(cloud warriors) will explode on the targeted location. in that way, you can hit the enemy with the damage a lot easier. also, maybe you can find a better icon for this skill.

2nd skill - it's like broodmother's web but with no regen and this one strengthens his skills. it's okay.

3rd skill - hmm.. interesting skill. but they will still follow you while in cloud right? that will be a problem with your invisibility. i suggest they don't follow you while your in cloud but they will not leave cloud until you do so.

4th skill - wow, a pure damage chain lightning. the 10/12/14 in here is the duration of the AS and MS right? and exactly what bonuses does the gryphons gain? is it the AS and MS bonus also? but for me, i suggest you remove the MS bonus part since you already have that in your 2nd skill

.nice hero and welcome to playdota.com

im giving this hero a t-up

khalid102 · 06-09-2011, 03:31 PM

thanx alot dude, maybe im not clear on a few things, here, the stats i jst made up wil take a better look because i know agility is all bout damage as game gets longer, the clouds are kinda like broods, but disapear, but you can keep casting it at lvl 4 so its kinda permanent.,the crit is self explanatory, but think that the gryphons should get it also as a 1 hit buff, so at lvl 3 ulti it could be like 2.5X200(just estimating) damage if all units hit same target, i changed the 1st skill, to explode at aoe path, like linas stun, a nice smalll AOE but can possibly be 500 magic damage.

But thank you once again for your awesome review

NinoDoko · 06-12-2011, 12:42 PM

I kinda like the idea of the hero. Especially the summons. What I dislike is the way clouds and spells interact.

What I like :

Each of the spells individually
The synergy outside clouds
The summons idea
The general hero idea

What I dislike / think it can change

The clouds are a nice idea, but I dislike the fact that your spells are stronger if used inside. I'd rather have the clouds give you increased attack speed or damage and remove the bonuses from the ultimate or the first spell.
Remove the crit from the ultimate. Maybe you can buff the other stats a bit but it doesn't fit.

Note that I suggest these changes because I feel like the hero would be more fun if he was centered around his summons, while I, personally, don't really like spells improving other spells. Tho I can live with that if you decide to keep it that way

I'd t-up the hero ^^

06-06-2011, 01:23 PM	#3
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06-07-2011, 02:41 PM	#5
khalid102 Member Join Date: May 2011 Posts: 21	Re: [AGI] Dragonhawk Captain will any1 rate my hero? review? anything? __________________ Please review my hero , il do the same for you, THANKS ^^^

06-07-2011, 03:05 PM	#6
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06-08-2011, 06:09 AM	#7
khalid102 Member Join Date: May 2011 Posts: 21	Re: [AGI] Dragonhawk Captain what? any1 at all? __________________ Please review my hero , il do the same for you, THANKS ^^^

06-08-2011, 07:42 AM	#8
Facebook Member Join Date: Nov 2010 Posts: 2,989 Blog Entries: 7	Re: [AGI] Dragonhawk Captain Review: 1st skill: The concept is good, but the problem is, is the summon unit, summoning unit is enough for DotA, try changing this skill to a better one, but dont lose the concept of that skill. 2nd skill: Synergies well with skills, like your concept in synergizing, so no problems. 3rd skill: Kinda bad and imba, just rescale the damage to 25/50/75/100 damage while the captain takes 12.5/25/37.5/50 damage Ulti: Same as first skill, just renew this skill but dont change it's concept, cause the synergy is good. Here are your goals from now: - Renew the 1st and ultimate skill, but dont change the concept - Rescale the damage of 3rd skill - Ask someone to review this hero. - Ask someone (or go to fan fiction section) to make a background story for you. - Introduce yourself in Introduce page. __________________ Isumi using her Hand power!

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06-08-2011, 11:02 AM	#9
khalid102 Member Join Date: May 2011 Posts: 21	Re: [AGI] Dragonhawk Captain thnx for the review fade2black i updated it , what do you think now? il review any1s if they take the time toreview mines. __________________ Please review my hero , il do the same for you, THANKS ^^^

06-08-2011, 11:26 AM	#10
tusuksate Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Posts: 163	Re: [AGI] Dragonhawk Captain 1st skill, overall it's nice skill but poison owl is funny, change it... 2nd skill, simple but acceptable skill.. 3th skill, why this skill has very short cooldown and the other hand his ulti has very long cooldown... ulti, exorcism but still have difference.... T-D for now __________________ Gordon - The elder Turtle (My first Hero Suggestion)

06-09-2011, 05:59 AM	#12
khalid102 Member Join Date: May 2011 Posts: 21	Re: [AGI] Dragonhawk Captain thanx for the reviews guys , i took what you guys said into consideration and made him better i hope, pls take a 2nd look? hes more like a captain of the skys now __________________ Please review my hero , il do the same for you, THANKS ^^^

06-09-2011, 06:16 AM	#13
Facebook Member Join Date: Nov 2010 Posts: 2,989 Blog Entries: 7	Re: [AGI] Dragonhawk Captain 1st skill, Good and best. No problems 2nd skill, fix the MS duration to 6/8/10/12 seconds 3rd skill, What's the synergy to other skills anyway? Ultimate skill, change it's theme to more sky themed (or at least wind themed) btw, please tell us the synergy so we could understand. __________________ Isumi using her Hand power!

06-09-2011, 06:27 AM	#14
Facebook Member Join Date: Nov 2010 Posts: 2,989 Blog Entries: 7	Re: [AGI] Dragonhawk Captain Change also your Title to "[Agi-Sent]Rain Skyfeather, Sky captain" __________________ Isumi using her Hand power!

06-09-2011, 01:14 PM	#15
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06-09-2011, 02:28 PM	#16
khalid102 Member Join Date: May 2011 Posts: 21	Re: [AGI,SENT]Sky Captain , Rain Skyfeather thanks for all the suggestions fade, i redid the skills like you suggested , pls comment if it is too your liking, also added back-story, wrote it myself so its kinda lame. __________________ Please review my hero , il do the same for you, THANKS ^^^

06-09-2011, 03:00 PM	#17
Facebook Member Join Date: Nov 2010 Posts: 2,989 Blog Entries: 7	Re: [AGI,SENT]Sky Captain , Rain Skyfeather I will make a cooler background story for ya if i have some time, maybe tomorrow. __________________ Isumi using her Hand power!

06-09-2011, 03:04 PM	#18
ReaC Member Join Date: Jun 2010 Location: Philippines Posts: 229	Re: [AGI,SENT]Sky Captain , Rain Skyfeather REVIEW!!! another hero with low stat gain, im just wondering why. can you justify it? 1st skill - hmm.. good skill. but im not suitable with the cast range. how aout like this... it's point-target but the projectile(cloud warriors) will explode on the targeted location. in that way, you can hit the enemy with the damage a lot easier. also, maybe you can find a better icon for this skill. 2nd skill - it's like broodmother's web but with no regen and this one strengthens his skills. it's okay. 3rd skill - hmm.. interesting skill. but they will still follow you while in cloud right? that will be a problem with your invisibility. i suggest they don't follow you while your in cloud but they will not leave cloud until you do so. 4th skill - wow, a pure damage chain lightning. the 10/12/14 in here is the duration of the AS and MS right? and exactly what bonuses does the gryphons gain? is it the AS and MS bonus also? but for me, i suggest you remove the MS bonus part since you already have that in your 2nd skill .nice hero and welcome to playdota.com im giving this hero a t-up __________________ I reviewed yours, pls review mine... VENTUS, WILD ZEPHYR RUN, HIT, THEN KILL!!! OTHERS

06-09-2011, 03:31 PM	#19
khalid102 Member Join Date: May 2011 Posts: 21	Re: [AGI,SENT]Sky Captain , Rain Skyfeather thanx alot dude, maybe im not clear on a few things, here, the stats i jst made up wil take a better look because i know agility is all bout damage as game gets longer, the clouds are kinda like broods, but disapear, but you can keep casting it at lvl 4 so its kinda permanent.,the crit is self explanatory, but think that the gryphons should get it also as a 1 hit buff, so at lvl 3 ulti it could be like 2.5X200(just estimating) damage if all units hit same target, i changed the 1st skill, to explode at aoe path, like linas stun, a nice smalll AOE but can possibly be 500 magic damage. But thank you once again for your awesome review __________________ Please review my hero , il do the same for you, THANKS ^^^

Last edited by khalid102; 06-10-2011 at 01:51 PM. Reason: changed the ulti, so why make new post?

06-12-2011, 12:42 PM	#20
NinoDoko Member Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: At home, which would be in the distant lands of Macedonia Posts: 1,533	Re: [AGI,SENT]Sky Captain , Rain Skyfeather I kinda like the idea of the hero. Especially the summons. What I dislike is the way clouds and spells interact. What I like : Each of the spells individually The synergy outside clouds The summons idea The general hero idea What I dislike / think it can change The clouds are a nice idea, but I dislike the fact that your spells are stronger if used inside. I'd rather have the clouds give you increased attack speed or damage and remove the bonuses from the ultimate or the first spell. Remove the crit from the ultimate. Maybe you can buff the other stats a bit but it doesn't fit. Note that I suggest these changes because I feel like the hero would be more fun if he was centered around his summons, while I, personally, don't really like spells improving other spells. Tho I can live with that if you decide to keep it that way I'd t-up the hero ^^ __________________ lanaya userbar supplied by LostFlip Need something reviewed? Have no fear, Nino is here! Just pm me / write a visitor message / anything.