[STR-SCRG]Aurius Rivendare - Death Knight

[fremdlaender]

Death Knight
Aurius Rivendare

• Background Story
• Hero Introduction

Aurius Rivendare was once a noble knight amonst the order of the Silver Hand. He was one of the man fighting under prince Arthas to purge Lordaeron from the threat of the plague. During the Culling of Stratholme, where dozens of innocent people were massacred, the paladins mind was twisted, bearing only rage and hatred in his heart for the plague, the undead and even his own people, who left him, Arthas and his allies to fight the Scourge in Stratholme and afterwards in Northrend on their own. Most of the soldiers died in this frozen wasteland, but Rivendare was risen by the Lich King, to fight for him as one of the first Death Knights. Now, he seeks to avenge himself and his allies being forsaken by those they wanted to protect.

To be written soon.

Strength - 23 + [2.4]
Agility - 16 + [1.8]
Intelligence - 19 + [2.0]

Affiliation:	Scourge
Theme:	Death Knight
Role:	Ganker/ Pusher
Damage:	52 - 56
Armor:	3.29
Movespeed:	295
Starting HP/MP:	587 /286
Attack Range:	128 (melee)

• Unholy Sphere
• Death Gate
• Manslayer
• Anti-Magic Shell

Type: Active Targeting: Point-Target Hotkey: R

Rivendare sends forth a sphere made of unholy energy to a target point, stunning the first hero it hits. The stun duration increases based on how many units it passed through before it reaches an enemy hero.

	Mana	Cooldown	Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	120	23 sec	1500	180	0.5 - 4 sec	80 damage, stuns based on units hit
2	120	22 sec	1500	180	0.5 - 4 sec	160 damage, stuns based on units hit
3	120	21 sec	1500	180	0.5 - 4 sec	240 damage, stuns based on units hit
4	120	20 sec	1500	180	0.5 - 4 sec	320 damage, stuns based on units hit

• Damage type: magic
• Has an initial stun duration of 0.5 seconds
• For every unit hit (friend or foe) the stun duration increases by 0.5 sec, for every allied hero by 1 sec
• Can be dodged like Mirana's Arrow
• Only deals its damage when it hits an enemy hero

• Death Gate
• Teleport

Type: Active Targeting: Point-Target Hotkey: E

The Death Knight places a death gate at a target point. He can teleport there at any time, dealing damage to every enemy unit in an AoE around it and increasing his MS to maximum for a few seconds.

	Mana	Cooldown	Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	80	70 sec	800	300	25 sec	Creates a death gate at target location
2	80	60 sec	800	300	25 sec	Creates a death gate at target location
3	80	50 sec	800	300	25 sec	Creates a death gate at target location
4	80	40 sec	800	300	25 sec	Creates a death gate at target location

• Rivendare can teleport to the location of a previously placed death gate at any time during the duration

Type: Active Targeting: - Hotkey: T

Rivendare teleports to his death gate, dealing damage to nearby enemies and boosting his MS to maximum.

	Mana	Cooldown	Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	50	8 sec	2000	-	1 sec	40 damage, 1 sec max MS
2	50	8 sec	2000	-	1 sec	80 damage, 1 sec max MS
3	50	8 sec	2000	-	2 sec	120 damage, 2 sec max MS
4	50	8 sec	2000	-	3 sec	160 damage, 3 sec max MS

• Damage type: magic
• Rivendare must be within 2000 range of a death gate to use this spell

Type: Passive Targeting: - Hotkey: T

Manslayer, the runeblade of Rivendare has the power to raise the dead, whenever it strikes an enemy. Every hit, there is a chance to raise a ghoul, which will leap towards a random enemy ensnaring him shortly and attack him for a few seconds. If Manslayer kills a unit, it will always rise a ghoul.

	Mana	Cooldown	Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	-	-	-	300	10 sec(*)/ 0.5(**)	3% chance
2	-	-	-	300	10 sec(*)/ 0.5(**)	6% chance
3	-	-	-	300	10 sec(*)/ 0.5(**)	9% chance
4	-	-	-	300	10 sec(*)/ 0.5(**)	12% chance

• (*) Duration of the ghoul
• (**) Duration of the Ensnare
• The ghouls have 22-28 Normal damage, 1 sec BAT, 550 HP, 2 heavy armor and 450 MS
• After spawning, the ghoul will leap towards a random target in a 300 AoE, ensnare him for 0,5 second and attack him for the remaining duration
• The ghouls are uncontrollable and will only attack its main target. If that one dies he will choose the next one nearby
• Ghouls will only spawn if they are killed by Rivendare's autoattack, not by his spells

Type: Active Targeting: Single-Target Hotkey: G

Rivendare summons powerful magic, that wraps around the target unit. As long as the shell is active, it will deal damage to the target unit. Every time the target casts a spell an unholy erruption will occur, dealing damage and slowing every unit nearby.

	Mana	Cooldown	Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	150	70	500	400	8 sec(*)/ 2(**)	30 damage per second, 140 damage and 40% slow per erruption
2	200	65	500	400	9 sec(*)/ 2(**)	50 damage per second, 200 damage and 40% slow per erruption
3	250	60	500	400	10 sec(*)/ 2(**)	70 damage per second, 260 damage and 40% slow per erruption

• Damage type: magic
• (*) Duration of the shell
• (**)Duration of the slow after an erruption

[fremdlaender]

Not a single comment?
I'm somehow disappointed.

[Padsoldier]

Is Death Gate visible to enemies? (If not, is it visible when getting summoned?)
I don't really get his synergy. If he uses Deathgate+Teleport to damage an enemy hero, then Sphere won't stun for a long time, because the enemy is almost within melee range so it does not hit enough units. For Manslayer he does not have enough Agi+gain to get enough attack speed and have it proc often. (Maybe on his Teleport he could also get some AS, or an ensured proc.)
Anti-Magic Shell (typo in name?) is very powerful, maybe even stronger than Doom (lower CD, does not silence but punishes casting spells hard).

[sirky004]

1st skill needs movespeed, its ok.
2nd skill remind of Fire Remnant
3rd skill I love it Why not make it an orb effect?
ulti skil I like it Kinda makes caster think twice before they can cast a spell.

overall I like the 3rd and the ulti.

[fremdlaender]

Originally Posted by Padsoldier

Is Death Gate visible to enemies? (If not, is it visible when getting summoned?)
I don't really get his synergy. If he uses Deathgate+Teleport to damage an enemy hero, then Sphere won't stun for a long time, because the enemy is almost within melee range so it does not hit enough units. For Manslayer he does not have enough Agi+gain to get enough attack speed and have it proc often. (Maybe on his Teleport he could also get some AS, or an ensured proc.)
Anti-Magic Shell (typo in name?) is very powerful, maybe even stronger than Doom (lower CD, does not silence but punishes casting spells hard).

The Death Gate is visible, yes.

His synergy is more of a spell combo, like Mirana.
You fire the sphere from further away at the enemy, hitting as many creeps as possible.
While it's in the air you can jump next to your enemy with Death Gate, dealing some damage and start bashing him.
With Anti-Magic Shell (fixing the typo) you can prevent him from casting spells or punish him for doing so. It's his choice what he wants to do, that's why I don't think it's stronger than Doom, what just does not let you cast anything.
The Manslayer procs help you keeping the target in place and maybe also strenghtens your Sphere before it hits.

The +AS is actually a nice idea, but the spell could get too strong and too similar with Mortred's Phantom Strike.

[Lotus V Eater]

the death knight theme is isn't popular now and past but with exceptional spells and workout, i believe, another one could make it like Abaddon did. first of all, when i saw your hero spells, the theme is very random you know, with like reincarnation and mobility alike. it does not mean bad, but sometime, when the theme is too random the hero could be quite bad (no offense).

1st spell - this spell is actually good. since the uses can be from initiation to last hit, the spell itself is a versatile one. the thing is, i don't see any justification making the stun duration increment when it passed an allied hero to 1 sec. just make it the same as 0.5 sec would be better, since it would be easier to code and there is very slim chance for your hero to standing in a straight position, specially during ganking.

2nd spell - i don't have any problem with teleportation kind of spell since i think it is unique. does his allied hero able to use this gate also? how about enemies? i think you should clarify that part a bit and i think by having his allied hero able to teleport with it as well, gonna make this hero quite a good positioner.

3rd spell - i see the synergy with his 1st spell, but does it really needed here? i don't think so. i mean the spell itself is a great concept, but with current dota hero, there is a lot of allied you can choose to be paired with you already in order to maximize the stun duration for the 1st spell (such as Furion, Chen, Eredar, Beastmaster and so on). i think this spell need a partial rework. maybe incorporate something even more unique like distance traveled as damage? since both his 1st spell and 2nd spell edi revolving towards the same area.

ultimate - kinda like an ion shell but with a twist. i don't see it as an interesting spell but kudos for a new kind of silencing the enemies part there. if it is me, i would do something different with his ultimate. maybe a kind of dark magic that gathers unit in a straight line maybe(think of Tauren Chieftan's ulti and maybe you can think of something there)? or something that would be connected to positioning stuffs like that. i mean, that would be great for your 1st spell and your teleportation stuff.

overall: he is good but needs something to make him even better. like i sad earlier, synergy is there but thematically, he still need something cooler, something that would make him even a better initiator and overall as a ganker.

[Name Rater]

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[sheep.skin]

What's the use of Wisp when we have a guy that doesn't need a Tether Relocate combo? I hate the Death Gate skill. Too useful. ._.

His Ultimate is kinda imba, in a way. I mean, if people so fragile like Lina and other balanced ones such as SF cast a spell while under the effects of the Ultimate, they'd die soon enough from the slow, from the beatdown of Rivendare's allies, and not being able to fight back effectively against other heroes. Please tweak a bit.

[fremdlaender]

Originally Posted by Lotus V Eater

the death knight theme is isn't popular now and past but with exceptional spells and workout, i believe, another one could make it like Abaddon did. first of all, when i saw your hero spells, the theme is very random you know, with like reincarnation and mobility alike. it does not mean bad, but sometime, when the theme is too random the hero could be quite bad (no offense).

1st spell - this spell is actually good. since the uses can be from initiation to last hit, the spell itself is a versatile one. the thing is, i don't see any justification making the stun duration increment when it passed an allied hero to 1 sec. just make it the same as 0.5 sec would be better, since it would be easier to code and there is very slim chance for your hero to standing in a straight position, specially during ganking.

2nd spell - i don't have any problem with teleportation kind of spell since i think it is unique. does his allied hero able to use this gate also? how about enemies? i think you should clarify that part a bit and i think by having his allied hero able to teleport with it as well, gonna make this hero quite a good positioner.

3rd spell - i see the synergy with his 1st spell, but does it really needed here? i don't think so. i mean the spell itself is a great concept, but with current dota hero, there is a lot of allied you can choose to be paired with you already in order to maximize the stun duration for the 1st spell (such as Furion, Chen, Eredar, Beastmaster and so on). i think this spell need a partial rework. maybe incorporate something even more unique like distance traveled as damage? since both his 1st spell and 2nd spell edi revolving towards the same area.

ultimate - kinda like an ion shell but with a twist. i don't see it as an interesting spell but kudos for a new kind of silencing the enemies part there. if it is me, i would do something different with his ultimate. maybe a kind of dark magic that gathers unit in a straight line maybe(think of Tauren Chieftan's ulti and maybe you can think of something there)? or something that would be connected to positioning stuffs like that. i mean, that would be great for your 1st spell and your teleportation stuff.

overall: he is good but needs something to make him even better. like i sad earlier, synergy is there but thematically, he still need something cooler, something that would make him even a better initiator and overall as a ganker.

Originally Posted by sheep.skin

What's the use of Wisp when we have a guy that doesn't need a Tether Relocate combo? I hate the Death Gate skill. Too useful. ._.

His Ultimate is kinda imba, in a way. I mean, if people so fragile like Lina and other balanced ones such as SF cast a spell while under the effects of the Ultimate, they'd die soon enough from the slow, from the beatdown of Rivendare's allies, and not being able to fight back effectively against other heroes. Please tweak a bit.

I won't really answer or justify anything, I just want you to know that I recognized your posts (long ago), I just didn't have time to reply.

Thank you for your replies.

I guess, if I want to support this suggestion further, I will have to remake/ change some skills.
I really like some parts about this hero that I don't want to change but some things you mentioned are true. He needs a better defined playstyle.

This hero was created in a hour of boredom and, as you basically said, it doesn't have the finesse of other suggestions I made nor was the effort of other suggestions used (I don't say no effort, just not at the same level as others ).
Gotta think about it and decide afterwards.

[Panoramik-]

Nice! I've got a few issues, but there's some real gems in here that I'm loving.

1- Unholy Sphere - This is too messy. Gaining damage from allied units is weird (yeah i see the synergy from Manslayer, and I'll get to that) unless it's affecting them in some way like Tusk's Snowball. I'd like to see it harm normal enemies it touches as well.

2- Death Gate - Love it. A nice unique type of blink. Just be wary of it's proximity to Ember's Fire Remnant.

To that end I'd reduce the damage, make the Gate targetable/destroyable and have a shorter CD. The MS bonus is interesting though not sure if he needs it. Maybe 2 secs at all levels? You could also make it so when the gate is destroyed/dies it damages/slows/stuns/vaccums or some other effect in the AoE. Perhaps it self-destructs after 3 uses and change the Teleport CD to 3 seconds or so. Just some ideas to toss around.

3 Manslayer - Too messy again. It's just so random and I have trouble buying the the effects. I'd honestly get rid of this altogether.

4- AM Shell - Now THIS is awesome. Very creative and deserving of an ultimate status. I would just to scale the duration better and balance the damage - it's pretty high. 5/7/9 seconds for 60 DPS is fair to me.

Alternatively, I'd make it 4/6/8 seconds 50 DPS and whenever the target cast a spell OR has a spell cast targeting it (from foes or allies), the AoE effects triggers.

If you use what I say that leaves Unholy Sphere to get overhauled and an empty ability slot for the passive. I'd find a way to incorporate a vacuum/reverse polarity skill somewhere because this guy relies on enemies being clumped together. He could also use a little more farm and some sort of attack boost.

Lastly, change the name of Death Knight and Anti-Magic Shell. Within Warcraft these are very different things than what you're proposing.