[AGI-SENT]Xeres Bloodfeather the Winged Maiden

[コクーン]

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Please understand that Xeres is only in her beginning stages. All the changes, if you should know, are based solely on the reviews given by the experts, lol, so please review her and I'll add whatever needs to be added. Thank you!
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Winged Maiden
Xeres Bloodfeather

Changelog:

11/03/09

• Replaced Mystical Infection with Shards of a Broken Heart.
• Made adjustments to Lux Verdé.
• Added improvements to Lux Verdé if it becomes scepter-upgradeable.

11/04/09

• Various balance changes.
• Added new model.
• Added skin.
• Added illustrations explaining the spells, for all you visual learners out there lol!
• Made cooldown for Shards of a Broken Heart 20 for all levels.

11/05/09

• Reduced duration of slow for Shards of a Broken Heart.
• Fixed armor.
• Increased chance to cast Gust.
• Increased AS gained from VF, decreased MS.
• Reduced channeling time for Lux Verdé.
• Various other balance changes, too lazy to put them all here, lol...

11/07/09

• Reduced MS gained from Vehement Fervor.
• Increased cooldown of Vehement Fervor.
• Made major changes to Lux Verdé.
• Added new illustration for Lux Verdé.
• Added clarifications for issues that seemed to have eluded xy4kuz4x for a long time now, lol.
• Increased damage dealt by Shards from 50/70/90/110 to 70/90/110/130.
• Increased attack range.

11/09/09

• Made some changes to Shards.
• Buffed MS gained by Vehement Fervor.

11/10/09

• Added missile speed and missile skin.

01/05/10

• Changed Background Story.
• Changed Shards of a Broken Heart (Active) to Intoxication (Passive).
• Added a condition to Vehement Fervor.

Background Story:

Daughter of the infamous Serena Bloodfeather, Xeres hailed from the highest peak of Stonetalon Mountain. She had been rejected by her mother from childhood because of her sweet nature towards travelers, and was taken care of by a circle of magicians. In lieu of spending her life with her foster magician-parents, she set out on a journey to rid the world of evil and soon joined the Sentinel.

Strength - 16 + 1.5
Agility - 23 + 2.6
Intelligence - 20 + 1.4


Model


Skin


Missile Model (credits to L|Enzo)

Affiliation:	Sentinel
Theme:	Harpy
Role:	Nuke, Gank, Good Chaser, Surprise Buttsecks
Damage:	44-51
Armor:	3.4
Movespeed:	300
Starting HP/MP:	435/258
Attack Range:	500
Missile Speed:	1100
Base Attack Time:	1.7

Intoxication

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Allied units around Xeres are intoxicated by the sweet scent escaping from her well-groomed wings. Adds +X armor based on how much damage a unit has inflicted.

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	Mana	Cooldown	C. Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	N/A	N/A	N/A	500	N/A	Limit of 2 armor
2	N/A	N/A	N/A	550	N/A	Limit of 5 armor
3	N/A	N/A	N/A	600	N/A	Limit of 8 armor
4	N/A	N/A	N/A	650	N/A	Limit of 11 armor

Notes:

• This skill has no effect on allied units that have not inflicted any damage at all.
• Does not affect Xeres herself.

Armor formula and damage cap of Intoxication.

Vehement Fervor

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Xeres hallucinates on happier days which gives her a burst in movement and attack speed but also making her more prone to danger.

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	Mana	Cooldown	C. Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	80	50	N/A	N/A	12 seconds	+2.5% MS, +8% AS, -12 armor
2	80	40	N/A	N/A	18 seconds	+5% MS, +15% AS, -11 armor
3	80	30	N/A	N/A	24 seconds	+7.5% MS, +22% AS, -10 armor
4	80	20	N/A	N/A	30 seconds	+10% MS, +29% AS, -9 armor

Gust

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When attacking, Xeres has a chance to send a gust of wind to trap her opponents in a cyclone and bring them closer to her.

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	Mana	Cooldown	C. Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	N/A	N/A	50 units in front	700 in a line	0.25 second	6% chance, 0.25 second cyclone
2	N/A	N/A	50 units in front	700 in a line	0.5 second	9% chance, 0.5 second cyclone
3	N/A	N/A	50 units in front	700 in a line	0.75 second	12% chance, 0.75 second cyclone
4	N/A	N/A	50 units in front	700 in a line	1 second	15% chance, 1 second cyclone

Notes:

• Brings enemies closer 100 units in front of Xeres.
• Cyclone does 70 damage at all levels.
• Limit of 5 enemy units at all levels.
• Enemies affected by the cyclone may be attacked.
• Does not affect flying units.

Lux Verdé

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Xeres summons her mage guards to aid her in a battle. She spreads her wings and flutters them violently while chanting a forgotten tune. The sky opens and the essences of her guardians come down to surround Xeres, severely damaging her enemies while mini-stunning every time they are attacked.

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	Mana	Cooldown	C. Range	AoE	Duration	Effects
1	220	160(130*)	N/A	500	3.5 seconds	Maximum of 470(500*) damage per unit.
2	220	140(110*)	N/A	600	3.5 seconds	Maximum of 540(580*) damage per unit.
3	220	120(90*)	N/A	700	3.5 seconds	Maximum of 610(660*) damage per unit.

Notes:

• Channeling. Channeling may be interrupted by stunning, moving, etc.
• Scepter-upgradeable (* shows improved values)
• Each 'spirit' deals damage. They all hit and mini-stun any enemy unit for a duration of 3.5 seconds until the maximum damage is achieved unless the channeling is interrupted.

*Illustration not drawn to scale.*

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SKILL SYNERGY

Under Construction

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All for Now. I'll be adding Hero and Item Synergies later. Thanks for all the reviews, they ALL helped.

[K1T]

I like Gust and Lux Verdé, they have good synergy together.
Mystical Infection is actually not bad, bot nothing new.
Not sure about Vehement Fervor, reminds me a lot one of old Naix passives, it dont really helps you and +24 MS is too OP. Even razor has +12 MS and not 23. maybe kkep numbers the same, but change conditions or make it an active AOE skill... dont know, but it needs a remake or full replacement

[-Yuuh™]

A small and fast skill review.

Mystical Infection: This skill has the same concept of Viper's Poison Attack. Difference: Small DPS, More duration. You should make other skill and raplace this one, you already has an passive attack. Gust and Mystical Infection will make a target unable to fight making you very unbalanced. Also, is that a auto-castable orb effect/buff placer skill? The icon is auto-cast but who know? There's no info about this.

Vehement Fervor: Unbalanced skill IMO because it's MS/IAS passive self buff, it should be active skill buff in my view.

Gust: This one seems realy cool and unique for me. Can piss enemies off making then cry :D

Lux Verdé: I know you didn't finished this hero yet but this skill needs a dept explanation right now because it's hard to understand how it works. Which's the channeling time? Forever?

[xy4kuz4x]

Skill 1 - like viper's poison attack. Nothing new to be review.

Skill 2 - 24% of 300 ms is 72. Nerf it. once again, just a plain skill and I think you must remake this skill.

Skill 3 - i like this skill. Nice. Can you attack the enemy when they get cyclone?

Ultimate - same concept with akasha, at least. Why it is a channeling spell? There is no channeling time.

Overall - I think you need to explain your skill more specific. Use the template plz. And think about new concept of skill, don't use same concept anymore. Read the guide again.

[コクーン]

Took me half an hour but I think the template is an effective and presentable way to convey what I think. Thanks again, xy4kuz4x!

[manafusion]

1st skill - to me, seems like a nerfed poison attack. remake this, considered a copy of viper's either way. and viper's poison attack is 3 mana cheaper.

2nd skill - no comments. good for chasing.

3rd skill - interesting and ingenious passive. good for stopping runners.

ulti - give channeling duration. (unless it is in the duration box). also, add how many damage an effect does and what type of damage it is.

[xy4kuz4x]

I suggest you to use dark kenshi's template fully. Since it helpful to newbie suggestor.
And i agree to remake the first skill (i was forgot to tell to you) . I think a skill that makes your enemy wanna escape from you. At least, that have a little synergy with the third skill.

[FlamingFist]

before i review, whats the role and theme?

[manafusion]

ohhh xan is a baby! sweeetttt!

[JoJo(themonkey]

cool idea! i like the cyclone skill

[コクーン]

Thanks!

I've successfully made some changes: I replaced Mystical Infection which many of you seemed to judge so hardly, ^^. Replaced it with Shards of a Broken Heart; cool name right? I hope you guys will like the concept.

[K1T]

Slows speed by 35%

duration?

[コクーン]

Originally Posted by K1T

duration?

5/6/7/8 seconds

I put it in duration, didn't you see it?

[-Yuuh™]

This template is good but you have to edit and add some info to skills and others. If you don't mind I have an example of this template with my edition.

[Neutral Agility] Pandemic Drake

It's the same template but edited and organized by me. I'll review the changes later.

[コクーン]

Made various balance changes. And, thanks Yuuh, but I think I'd prefer this template. Maybe it's because I don't want to change templates all the time. xy4kuz4x also wanted me to use Dark Kenshi's template but I don't really have In-Depth Explanations for my skills. What more is there to add than what is already present? I have also grown to like this official template, so sorry but I have to turn you down with all due respect.

[-Yuuh™]

Originally Posted by MegaWeedle

Made various balance changes. And, thanks Yuuh, but I think I'd prefer this template. Maybe it's because I don't want to change templates all the time. xy4kuz4x also wanted me to use Dark Kenshi's template but I don't really have In-Depth Explanations for my skills. What more is there to add than what is already present? I have also grown to like this official template, so sorry but I have to turn you down with all due respect.

I know it's annoying to create new template every time, but who would do that? The template what I use it's kept in a notepad, so every time I need to make a new suggestion I copy and paste it. Only some heroes needs new parts at template like, calculations explanations, sub-skills and etc. Depth explanations it's simple, you just explain how the ability works in game in few words and if you can with screenshots. Things that need to be added that I've perceived are, information about mechanics statistics: Active/Passive/Auto-Cast/Aura/Orb Effect/Buff Placer/Allowed Targets/Targeting Type/Hotkeys..

I'm not asking you to use my template or someone's template. I just want to tell you that you've missing these important things to be added, making your hero suggestion more comprehensive for those who review. Thanks for reading.

[コクーン]

Cool.

Anyway, I'd like to know what you think about Mystical Infection's replacement. I know you're an experienced and knowledgeable member here, so won't you please? Thanks a lot in advanced, it means so much to me.

[-Yuuh™]

Originally Posted by MegaWeedle

Cool.

Anyway, I'd like to know what you think about Mystical Infection's replacement. I know you're an experienced and knowledgeable member here, so won't you please? Thanks a lot in advanced, it means so much to me.

LoL,

About experienced and knowledgeable member, isn't good to qualificate members IMO, you're right that some of members have experience here but I don't like the qualifications so much, but thanks for the compliment. Anyone can earn experience here as you will. About review, I promissed a new one and I'll do.

Shards of a Broken Heart: The skill has same concept as before, slow the target. It's better in a way, you've mixed some skills, and now it's an AoE Slow that can aid at gangs. The cooldown IMO should be a single one like: 20/20/20/20 instead of decrease by level.

Vehement Fervor/Gust: No changes.

Lux Verdé: Line damage, cool. How about make Xeres creates the Lux with an extreme wind speed dealing damage to the line that she travels or even Xeres becomes an Tornado with a green glow effect that harm enemies in a line and knocks them to the side? It would be nice to see an hero becoming an Tornado as Harpies are known as wind creatures. The improvements given by Aghanim's Scepter are balanced for an Agility hero.

[コクーン]

Awesome! Thanks for this, and I'm definitely considering the Lux Verdé animation and effects, but I won't do anything too drastic though. And Vehement Fervor did change a little. I made it active so it's not so imbalanced. Thanks for the positive feedback, I'm really happy now.

[xy4kuz4x]

My 2nd review

Hero Information (1/4)
- template is okay.
- stats is fine. But, makes the armor have real number and don't use point at armor.
- theme and role are underused, i think and ganker theme is all right. Anyway, why all harpies in PD always a ganker?
- story is nice enough
- icon is N/A in my pc.

Shards of a broken heart (2/3)
- description has little error, but still clear to me.
- a simple skill, it's like huskar's ulti. But still acceptable to me.
- 35% slow for 8 sec is insane. Nerf it to 25 - 30% or 5 - 6 second.

Vehemont Vervor (2/3)
- description is clear enough to me.
- no, you just combine clinkz's skills but without invisibility. As you said. Need more original concept.
- 24% isn't a little number. Nerf it. And AS must higher, coz u r ganker.

Gust (1/3)
- description is very short and clear.
- I think this is your only unique skill. Keep it up.
- I think the chance must be increased a bit.

Lux Verdé(2/2)
- description is very unclear. Need more explanation about the mechanic.
- i guess your skill
is unique, but due to unclear description so i null for now.
- 6 sec channeling isn't a short time. Nerf it.

Synergy (3/3)
- you have ms bonus from skill 2, so why do you need to slow enemy with skill 1? Or vice versa?
- makes item synergy.
- makes hero synergy.

Overall (11/18)
you got 11 issues to be fixed.

Good luck, pm me when you made a changed.